Drinking Coffee Elsewhere (Revision)

Word Count 230

Drinking Coffee Elsewhere was very humorous to read and had extremely vivid descriptions. ZZ would give a description that sometimes had nothing to do with the object but still described very well. She compared being in the bathroom to being inside the belly of a whale, using an effective metaphor.The scene-setting she wrote engaged me in the book and made it enjoyable.
Packer said the girls admired Octavia’s hair and listened to her every word “as though whatever she had to say would somehow activate their own follicles." I love that line because it shows me how attentive and patient the girls were when it came to listening to Octavia.
The chapter I read did not use many quotes. The quotes were very short and to the point which added to the scene. But for the most part there would be a short quote with a lot of description.
The dialogue between the characters was also short but it gave real sense of who the characters where. The way they called one character “snot”, and that they were going to have their “secret meeting”. If there had not been as much description I would still be able to tell that the characters where children. The strongest part of the chapter I read was the description. It really painted a picture of the characters and the scene.